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some say that because many people are living much longer , the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably . to what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Part of the community thinks to extend the
age
 of
retirement
 since many
people
 are living longer than previously. As
people
 need money to live and there are more job opportunities around the world , I strongly agree with that statement.
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, due to various ,
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reasons most populations expected maturity of life had been extended worldwide . With
this
 , they need to spend more money on various purposes and their requirement
also
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 high. Unfortunately, with the current
age
 of ,
retirement
 they spend most of their valuable time as unemployed.
For example
, a recent survey done by American university shows , most
people
 who retire from their previous jobs , seeks new jobs since
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are they
they
 unable to cope with the financial problems that they face. At the same time , worldwide there are many employees waiting for a skilled labour force to join with them to start production . With the low
retirement
age
 currently practice in most countries ,
people
 waste their valuable job skills and most jobs opportunities are wane due to the unavailability of trained skilled workers.
For instance
 , recent research shows , factories in most European countries facing problems due to the unavailability of skilled labourers . They propose the government extend the
retirement
age
 of their employers to keep the production on. In conclusion ,
people
 around the world live more years than previously and they are healthy and capable of working more than the current
retirement
age
 practice in most countries. At the same time, they need to work more to complete their requirements and most companies seek them to complete their requirement of a skilled workforce. Due to these ,reasons the writer strongly agrees with the given statement.
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