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These days free music and free films are available online. Is this a position or negative development?

Modern technology has changed the way of living, Entertainment, education, news everything is available
in
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online. Nowadays, all
latest
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the latest
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 music albums and
movies
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easily
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 accessible for all and Sunday, And
this
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 thing have
plethora
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 of pros. But it
also
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have
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 some cons to
the
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society. As far as my views are concerned, I think free of cost songs and
movies
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 are more benefits as compared to its drawbacks. There are myriads of reasons to support that easily available
of
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recreational thing it is
positive
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a positive
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 development.
First
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 and foremost ,
Entertainment
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the Entertainment
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industry
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 is not only for
affluence
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 part of society. It is
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 accessible for
under
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the under
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 privilege section
also
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.
Moreover
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, It is good for old people, who do not have
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 anything in their leisure time because aloneness
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 many mental problems like rude behaviour, stress and stain, depression and etcetera. Unpaid music and
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movies
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movie
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aremovie
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 helpful to entertain themselves as well as in
thr
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the
hecte
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hectic
 lifestyle. People do not have much time to go cinema with their life,because of virtual media they can download their favourite and latest movie and watch
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 their family at
anytime
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.
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, the demand
of
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 free content is really high
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these days.
Hence
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,
entertainment
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the entertainment
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industry
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 launch new software
such
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 as
OTT
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the OTT
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 platform to watch amply of
movies
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,
listen
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 tonnes of songs without pay or sometimes with miner cost of
annual
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the annual
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 subscription. Despite several boons of free music and
movies
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but
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it cannot put the back burner of
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the negative
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 side of
this
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 thing. The major drawback is
sale
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the sale
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 of
albus
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albums
 and
movies
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 DVD'S and the shows run in
cinema
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the cinema
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. Bodies of work in
this
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industry
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 do not make
profit
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a profit
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 from their sales.
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, masses
addicited
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addicted
 to screens,
they
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intentionally or unintentionally spend a huge
amound
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amount
 of time on
internet
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the internet
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.
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,
these thing
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 can be
control
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 by some rules and
limitions
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limitations
also
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 if one
industry
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grow
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 down, so many new
are
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ones are
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take
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 birth. To wrap the whole thing, it can be analyzed that free availability of media
have
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 more merits than demerits to
thr
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the
 strata of
the
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society. But,if used under some regulations and restrictions. So
commeners
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commenters
commoners
 do not face any health
problem
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problems
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.

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