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Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human’s life. Discuss both views and give your opinion – Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There is no doubt that these days learning from
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 of the past is important to avoid repeating previous
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decisions
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 about our life
today
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. The question is, is
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 the main source of
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 to understand human's life or we can not
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 from previous
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history
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 better
decisions
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today
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 essay, I am going to discuss both views and draw my own conclusion. In terms of some views, some
people
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 believe that
history
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 can not supply us
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information
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 to make the best
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 time. The main reason given to support
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 claim is that nowadays the world
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 and face
a different kinds
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different kinds
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 of
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such
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 as
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 change,
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, there are
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challenges
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 in the past
today
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climate
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 is a modern phenomenon
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that require
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require
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 policies and new procedures, and as
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climate
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 change did not exist in the past,
people
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 will not be able to
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 from prior
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history
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 how to mitigate the problem of
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 change nowadays.
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, there are
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believe
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 that
history
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 may be actually a helpful source of
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 in
history
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 maybe help us to
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 better
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today
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avoid
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 repeating previous
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, there was a lot of wrong practices in the past regarding human rights just as, racial discrimination and gender discrimination.
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 in the past used to treat Africans as slaves.
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, women were not guaranteed equal rights as men.
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, when
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 come to know
problems
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 behind these negative practices, they take new procedures to avoid previous wrongs. In conclusion,
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challenges
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 that we face
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today
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 differ from
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 in the past. I believe that governments can use
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history
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 as
source
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 of
information
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 to avoid repeating the
mistakes
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 of the past in the future.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lessons
  • mistakes
  • insights
  • human behavior
  • cultural diversity
  • applicable
  • biased
  • distorted
  • present-focused
  • personal development
  • societal development
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