Some people believe that too many resources and attention are devoted to the protection of wild animals and birds ? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

According to some individuals, there is too much focus and resources are given to the safety of wild
animals
and birds . In my opinion,these
such
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animals
and birds are important for our ecosystem and they are on verge of extinction. So ,
that is
why my views are
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same
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wavelength
with
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this
ideology.
To begin
with,the government of every country requires to protect the remaining wildlife organisms because there
are
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high
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chance that they may
also
get extinct soon ,which will directly cause a disturbance in the economy.to
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,according to a report by The Hindu Newspaper,in
india
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India
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,owing to the population of lions in
the
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North
India
,the population of monkeys has increased hugely .
Thus
,we need to monitor these activities,and
also
provide more funds to achieve
it
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.
Furthermore
,
this
is
also
true that the hunting of tigers ,wild pigs and buffaloes is popular in many parts of the world ,to obtain meat . In
this
way , there is still no strict laws to prevent
such
unlawful acts against innocent creatures . It should crucial for
regims
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regimes
regime
to give more attention
on
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wild creatures.
For instance
,according to a survey by the world protection organization conducted,in
India
, every year,thousands of deers and tigers are illegally killed in southern
India
. To conclude,taking into consideration from both views,it is felt that
although
resources and attention,which are getting by
such
animals
and birds are
indespensable
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indispensable
.since ,if they will extinct ,its straight effect on
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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.As well as it
also seen
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that hunting
animals
are
also
increasing day by day.so ,it is important to restrict them. According to my perception,
i
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am in the favour of
this
phenomenon.
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