Prevention is better than, cure reaserching and treating desease is too costly so it would be better to invest in prevention measures. To what extent do you agree?

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Medical surgeries and treatments for diseases would be highly costly. But trying to prevent the disease from the start is not costly. In my ,opinion folk should take care of their health and try to prevent illness.

Firstly

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, most of society is eating junk food and cooked food

that is

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causing health problems.

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, communities that are occupied with lots of work don't care what they are eating they focus more on money that causes cancer, and other illnesses. While other folks care more about being healthy and trying to prevent sickness, they do exercise and eat good food right on time they will not get healthy illnesses. Even if people get sick there are some medicines that can help. In my ,prospecting I want to prevent sickness because trying to overcome sicknesses in the future will be costly, you have to bear the pain, the disease might be contagious, etc. Preventing illness like Carona means staying home wearing a mask and sanitizing whenever you are going outside.

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, some people are born with diseases that they can't overcome. In the end, being healthy doesn't only prevent sicknesses but you can live more and spend time with your family which spreads happiness.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

202 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Healthcare expenditure
Preventive measures
Cost-effective
Population health
Psychological well-being
Quality of life
Public health policy
Holistic approach
Pandemic preparedness
Vaccination programs
Chronic diseases
Lifestyle modifications
Health education
Early detection
Treatment modalities
Innovative therapies
Epidemiological studies

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