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some people prefer to eat At food stands oR restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home , Which do you prefer ? Use specific seasons and examples to support your answer .

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Considering the importance of
food
 in human's life an array of society prefers to eat
food
 available at stalls and hotels, whilst, a handful of
people
 like to have homemade
food
 as proper diet is among the primary prerequisites of health. After enumerating certain factors, I would justify my preference
to
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for
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 homemade
food
.
First
 and foremost,
food
 prepared at
home
 is hygienic and nutritious.
On the other hand
 , fast
food
 available outside Contains
high
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level
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levels
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 of sugar, artificial sweeteners, fat acids which
consequently
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 harmful for health. To exemplify, high fat and high sugar can cause severe health issues
such
 as obesity and
heartattacks
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heart attacks
 . Apart from
this
 , cooking
food
 at
home
 is
heartening
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 experience and prevents
from
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apply
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infections caused by
unhygienic
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an unhygienic
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 diet.
People
 enjoy a lot
while
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making
food
 at
home
 as they can spend time with family members. Since most of the
people
 remain busy in their regular work schedule
so
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dining at
home
 gives them a chance to Sit together and Chit - chat with their loving family members. On the flip side ,a group of thoughts
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believes
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belives
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believes
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 the tasty spices and flavours of different
food
 items fascinate
People
. A sizeable number of youngsters become victims of
this
 conviction as they tend to have oily and
spicey
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spicy
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food
 so they prefer to have
food
 prepared at restaurants.
Besides
this
, some
people
 think it saves umpteen times of them which they can devote to
another crucial tasks
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another crucial task
other crucial tasks
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.
For instance
, while working at
home
people
orderr
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order
food
 online which saves lots of time
of
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for
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 them.
Thus
 they Prefer outside
food
. To conclude,
although
 some
people
 prefer Junk
food
 over homemade
food
 ;
however
, as advantages of
food
 cooked at
home
 overweigh the benefits of
food
 at Stalls, I would always like
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homemade
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home made
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homemade
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food
. It is only occasionally that I would like to have
food
 outside .
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