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Some people believe that charity organizations should help people wherever they live, others think they should help people in their country only. Discuss both views, give your opinion

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There are two different views about charity organizations.
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 of them believe that
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 organization should help
people
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 in its province,
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 in another view
people
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 should be helped by
charities
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 wherever in the
world
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, not only in their country. It is believed that the latter viewpoint is more useful than the
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one
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. During
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 new era,
charities
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 should make attention to the global village.
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 word by its power shows everything to everyone. When you live on
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 earth you can not divide
people
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 into groups due to their
countries
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 languages or colours.
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,
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 kind of
organizations
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 must help
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, not only in their society
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 but
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 in other
countries
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 which need their help.
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, Singapore is a wealthy country,
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, if its
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 help African
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 for improving their lives, Africans can live better
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. But by the view of the
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 group, they should not help them , so Singapore would be more wealthy
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 Africa would be poorer.
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, if
charities
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 do not try to help all
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 around the
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, global would be divided into two groups which is not the pleasure of all of the
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. poor
people
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 try to get more money by choosing other ways same as violence.
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, powerful
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 would go towards war due to their power and wealth. Same as some
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 which are pursuing war and want to be the
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 power in the
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. Facing
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 situation has just
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 result and the result is a severe fluctuation among the
people
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 in the
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 and it is not good for no
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. in conclusion,
people
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 are the same and no
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 and nothing can not divide them into several pieces.
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,
charities
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 organization in any kind of help
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 should help all
people
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 without considering their region, language or colour. If all
people
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 learn how to help each other, we can have a nice
world
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 in future.
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