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The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life.

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The older
generation
 is a term used to refer to the past, specifically people of an age that was considered old when they were alive. The term can
also
 be used in reference to those born before a particular event or time period.
for example
, baby boomers were part of the older
generation
 of several decades after world war because they had been born prior to 1945. The younger
generation
 is a group of people born in
the
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1980, and 1990s between 1981 and 1997. The younger
generation
 is an extremely diverse group with many different interests, but
they
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 have in common is that they were all born during or after the rise of technology. There difference in lifestyle between the older
generation
 and the young
generation
. The older
generation
more
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is more
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 set in their ways while the younger
generation
want
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 to explore new things and do what they need. Culture is something
that is
 passed down from
generation
 to
generation
. The old
generation
are
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 more involved in their culture than the younger
generation
, who want to explore other cultures and what they have
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an offer
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offer
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. Religion is something that the older
generation
 brings with them
form
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 their childhood. The younger generations are more open to spirituality because of how diverse they are and what religion means
different
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 people in
different
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part
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 of the world.
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