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It has been more than 40 years since man first landed on the moon. Some people think that space research is a waste of money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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it is true that the landed on the moon played an important development in
space
science
 in the world and that since gave us realities information
instead
 of our imagination.
although
,
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 some peoples advocate that landing on the moon need build huge
space
 ship by spending
ofmillions
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millions
of millions
 dollars without any benatife, I can not agree with
this
 as I believe that
space
science
 helps us to get a lot of information we do not know before.
Firstly
,
space
science
,
such
 as landing on the moon and bringing samples from there to study or do some test on the soil there , checking which gases were there as well play a significant role in the development of
space
science
.
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, when they did spaceflight they knows pretty sure that there are 8 planets around the earth and the distance between each plant and the life situation and specification as well there.
Secondly
, spaceflight could help us to get more information about the solar system.
First
 of all, some students are interested in
space
science
, and they have the plan to be members of spaceflight in future, In a nutshell, there is no doubt that
space
science
 does bring a lot of benefits to
science
 in
this
 sector and help the earth to survive.
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