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Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand and what measures could government and individuals take to respond to this problem ?

#water #resource #parts #world #demand #measures #government #individuals
In these
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 days, there are many individuals
also
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who also
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 suffer from lack of
water
 in some nations and
this
 has become
big
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a big
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 problem for
next
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the next
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 generations
also
 . So,
this
 essay will highlight the elements
besides
this
 and
also
 represent some measures to solve
this
 issue. To start with, two main reasons are associated with
this
 problem. The demand for
water
also
 increases day by day because of the population.
First
 and foremost, there are many farmers who
use
 chemicals for growing better crops but these dangerous chemicals do mix with
water
 through clay and do
pullate
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pulled
pulling
plate
 to
water
.
Secondly
, all factories or industries
use
 a lot of amount of
water
 in process of products and pollute
water
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the water
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 of factories
also
 mix with clean
water
 . These are big reasons for
this
.
For example
 , according to a survey, 95 %
industries
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of industries
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use
 more
water
 for making things.
On the other hand
, there are some solutions to tackle
with
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this
 problem.
Firstly
 ,
public
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the public
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 should not waste
water
 and collect
to
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apply
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rain
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rainwater
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water
 after that, they can do recycle
to
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water
 and
then
use
 it. With
this
, they can save to clean
water
.
However
, the government should new build
water
 pipes system for recycling
water
 as well as the authorities need to encourage people for using to recycle
water
 . Owing to
this
, they can save on drinking
water
. To conclude,
this
 essay highlighted the causes are chemicals which
use
 in agriculture and factories
use
 more
water
, as well as
also
this
 essay represented the solutions are the fold : the government and people should
use
 to recycle
water
.
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