Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Beyond doubt, there has been much discussion revolving around the issue of whether
legislator
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should allocate more funds to train
system
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instead
of
roads
. It is the
primarily
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job of lawmakers to provide
good
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transport
system
to their dwellers. As far as my views are concerned, I partially agree with the given statement, railways
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more important than
roads
,
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because I believe that
both
mode
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of transportation have
own
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benefits and
drawback
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and
both
are necessary. So,
government
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should spend equal money on
both
way
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of travelling. There are myriads of reasons to support that why we need advance railways
system
.
First
and foremost,
trains
are the fast, convenient and reliable mode of travel for
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distance
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. Because it
provide
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AC
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sleeper coach, food, and utility
system
with too many
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.
Secondly
, it is far cheaper than other vehicles, even somebody travel alone or with their family.
However
,
sometime
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due to bad weather or some kind of technical issue
trains
are
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from their schedule time which is inconvenient for their passengers.
Also
, if authorities only spend on railway lines it is not
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development of the country. Since, on railway
lines
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only
trains
can run, not any other automobile engine.
On the other hand
, smooth and developed
roads
good
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for
both
private and public
transport
. It is
better
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way to cover
shot
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distance
visit
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.
Moreover
,
roads
really
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useful to connect remote and hill areas
to
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with urban facilities.
Which
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is not possible by
trains
, because
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every countryside area and
make
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railway lines on mountains
it
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is more difficult than
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roads
for
these particular location
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.
Furthermore
,
roads
system
fast and easy way to reach any location during any kind of emergency like people
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their car to reach
hospital
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.
In addition
,
roads
play a significant role
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any war situation like
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and their material
transport
by
roads
easily. To wrap the whole thing, it can be analyzed that railways and
roads
are
both
superior
mode
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of
transport
. So,
government
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should spend money on
both
sections equally for
overall
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development
for
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the nation.
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  • environmental footprint
  • efficiency
  • pollution
  • cost-effectiveness
  • economic development
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • initial investment
  • maintenance
  • upgrades
  • rural
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