Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Beyond doubt, there has been much discussion revolving around the issue of whether
legislator
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legislators

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should allocate more funds to train
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system
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systems

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instead
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of
roads
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. It is the
primarily
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primary

It appears that the adverb primarily is attempting to modify the noun job. Consider replacing the adverb with an adjective.

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job of lawmakers to provide
good
Correct article usage
a good

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transport
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system
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to their dwellers. As far as my views are concerned, I partially agree with the given statement, railways
is
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are

The singular verb is does not appear to agree with the plural subject railways. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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more important than
roads
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,
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apply

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because I believe that
both
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mode
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modes

The singular countable noun mode follows the quantifier both, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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of transportation have
own
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their own

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benefits and
drawback
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drawbacks

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and
both
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are necessary. So,
government
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the government

The noun phrase government seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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should spend equal money on
both
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way
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ways

The singular countable noun way follows the quantifier both, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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of travelling. There are myriads of reasons to support that why we need advance railways
system
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.
First
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and foremost,
trains
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are the fast, convenient and reliable mode of travel for
long
Add a hyphen
long-distance

It appears that long distance is missing a hyphen. Consider adding the hyphen(s).

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distance
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distances

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. Because it
provide
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provides

It appears that the subject pronoun it and the verb provide are not in agreement. Consider changing the verb.

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AC
Correct article usage
an AC

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sleeper coach, food, and utility
system
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with too many
stoppage
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stoppages

The singular countable noun stoppage follows the quantifier many, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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.
Secondly
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, it is far cheaper than other vehicles, even somebody travel alone or with their family.
However
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,
sometime
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sometimes

It appears that sometime is used incorrectly. Review the following notes to determine the appropriate usage for your context.

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due to bad weather or some kind of technical issue
trains
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are
delay
Wrong verb form
delayed

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from their schedule time which is inconvenient for their passengers.
Also
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, if authorities only spend on railway lines it is not
overall
Correct article usage
the overall

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development of the country. Since, on railway
lines
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,lines

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only
trains
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can run, not any other automobile engine.
On the other hand
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, smooth and developed
roads
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good
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are good

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for
both
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private and public
transport
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. It is
better
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a better
the better

The noun phrase better way seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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way to cover
shot
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short

The word shot doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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distance
visit
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visits

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.
Moreover
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,
roads
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really
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are really

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useful to connect remote and hill areas
to
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too

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with urban facilities.
Which
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This

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is not possible by
trains
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, because
join
Wrong verb form
joining

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every countryside area and
make
Wrong verb form
making

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railway lines on mountains
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply

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is more difficult than
made
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making

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb made. Consider changing it.

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roads
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for
these particular location
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this particular location
these particular locations

It appears that the plural demonstrative these is modifying the singular noun location. Consider using a singular demonstrative or a plural noun instead.

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.
Furthermore
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,
roads
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system
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fast and easy way to reach any location during any kind of emergency like people
use
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uses

The plural verb use does not appear to agree with the singular subject way. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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their car to reach
hospital
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the hospital
a hospital

The noun phrase hospital seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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.
In addition
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,
roads
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play a significant role
under
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in

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any war situation like
army
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the army
an army

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and their material
transport
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by
roads
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easily. To wrap the whole thing, it can be analyzed that railways and
roads
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are
both
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superior
mode
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modes

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of
transport
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. So,
government
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the government

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should spend money on
both
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sections equally for
overall
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the overall

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development
for
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of

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the nation.

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