Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Beyond doubt, there has been much discussion revolving around the issue of whether
legislator
should allocate more funds to train Fix the agreement mistake
legislators
system
Fix the agreement mistake
systems
instead
of roads
. It is the primarily
job of lawmakers to provide Change the adverb
primary
good
Correct article usage
a good
transport
system
to their dwellers. As far as my views are concerned, I partially agree with the given statement, railways is
more important than Change the verb form
are
roads
,
because I believe that Remove the comma
apply
both
mode
of transportation have Change to a plural noun
modes
own
benefits and Correct pronoun usage
their own
drawback
and Fix the agreement mistake
drawbacks
both
are necessary. So, government
should spend equal money on Add an article
the government
both
way
of travelling.
There are myriads of reasons to support that why we need advance railways Change to a plural noun
ways
system
. First
and foremost, trains
are the fast, convenient and reliable mode of travel for long
Add a hyphen
long-distance
distance
. Because it Fix the agreement mistake
distances
provide
Change the verb form
provides
AC
sleeper coach, food, and utility Correct article usage
an AC
system
with too many stoppage
. Change to a plural noun
stoppages
Secondly
, it is far cheaper than other vehicles, even somebody travel alone or with their family. However
, sometime
due to bad weather or some kind of technical issue Replace the word
sometimes
trains
are delay
from their schedule time which is inconvenient for their passengers. Wrong verb form
delayed
Also
, if authorities only spend on railway lines it is not overall
development of the country. Since, on railway Correct article usage
the overall
lines
only Add a comma
,lines
trains
can run, not any other automobile engine.
On the other hand
, smooth and developed roads
good
for Add a missing verb
are good
both
private and public transport
. It is better
way to cover Add an article
a better
the better
shot
distance Correct your spelling
short
visit
. Fix the agreement mistake
visits
Moreover
, roads
really
useful to connect remote and hill areas Add a missing verb
are really
to
with urban facilities. Replace the word
too
Which
is not possible by Correct pronoun usage
This
trains
, because join
every countryside area and Wrong verb form
joining
make
railway lines on mountains Wrong verb form
making
it
is more difficult than Correct pronoun usage
apply
made
Change the form of the verb
making
roads
for these particular location
. Change the determiner
this particular location
these particular locations
Furthermore
, roads
system
fast and easy way to reach any location during any kind of emergency like people use
their car to reach Change the verb form
uses
hospital
. Add an article
the hospital
a hospital
In addition
, roads
play a significant role under
any war situation like Change preposition
in
army
and their material Add an article
the army
an army
transport
by roads
easily.
To wrap the whole thing, it can be analyzed that railways and roads
are both
superior mode
of Fix the agreement mistake
modes
transport
. So, government
should spend money on Add an article
the government
both
sections equally for overall
development Correct article usage
the overall
for
the nation.Change preposition
of
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