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The world is experiencing a dramatic increase in population. This is causing problems not only for poor, undeveloped countries, but also for industrialized and developing nations. Describe some of the problems that overpopulation causes, and suggest at least one possible solution.

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The population has been increasing at an exponential rate globally which is creating
problems
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 for both the poor and underdeveloped; and industrialized and developed countries.
Overpopulation
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 causes major issues for all the nations
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 as congestion on roads and crowding in
cities
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.
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, these
problems
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 can be tackled by encouraging
use
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the use
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 of public transport as well as by changing
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infrastructure
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the infrastructure
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 of urban regions. Owing to
overpopulation
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,
people
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 face
problems
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 of road congestion and crowding in
cities
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.
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, many
people
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 own private automobiles for their convenience in all countries around the globe. Some of the poor
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 take loans to buy their own cars.
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,
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 number of private vehicles results in the problem of traffic delays and congestion on roads.
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majority
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the majority
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 prefers to live in
cities
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 and the world population is increasing rapidly, urban areas become extremely crowded. Take London as an illustration where crowding can be seen everywhere due to
overpopulation
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. The practical solutions to these
problems
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 are increasing the use of public transportation
system
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systems
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 and changes in the
infrastructure
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 of urban regions.
People
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 can be motivated to use public transport more than their cars by education and awareness. Students can be taught at schools and television programmes can teach adults about the benefits of using trains, buses and trams
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 of cars.
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, alternation in
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infrastructure
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the infrastructure
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 of
cities
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 can reduce the issue of crowding. Urban planners can introduce new architectural designs which can be incorporated in urban areas to mitigate overcrowding.
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, skyscrapers and tower blocks construction can accommodate a huge number of
people
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 in
cities
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. In conclusion,
overpopulation
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 creates
problems
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 of traffic jams and crowding in
cities
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.
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, these issues can be dealt with if
people
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 prefer public transport over private vehicles.
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, the
infrastructure
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 of
cities
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 can be modified to cater for the contemporary needs of
people
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.
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