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write an opinion essay on the topic: Cinema will soon be a thing of the past.

#topic #cinema
Nowadays,
cinema
 is something rarely heard. But it’s actually a wonderful thing. It is a place where people can go not just to watch a movie, but a place where they can relax and forget for a moment the problems and worries they have. Unfortunately, the concept of “
cinema
” is increasingly beginning to disappear. At some
point
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 it will be a thing of the past. Why is
this
 happening? In my opinion,
this
 is happening because more and more people prefer to stay at home and watch a movie on TV or laptop.
For example
, the society of the 21st century already has access to an awful lot of programs, sites and applications from where we can watch or download a movie. It’s sad, but it’s becoming a fact.
On the other hand
, I like
cinema
 and,
for example
, to some extent I would rather go to the
cinema
 than stay at home and share
this
 time with a loved one. I prefer it because we have more social contact. To sum up, the
cinema
 is a good thing, let more people visit it. But the fact is that it will soon be thing of the past.
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