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Some people think that it is best to live in a horizontal city while others think of a vertical city. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Deciding on living in a
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 is the most important question for the majority of people considering its geographical arrangement and other amenities available in the place. some people prefer to live in the flat
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 which they consider best,while others go for the vertical
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. in the
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 paragraphs elaborate on both sides in-depth but I personally prefer to live in the horizontal
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. vertical cities comprise skyrocket buildings, complexes and structures which try to accommodate the huge number of the growing populations in the small urban area.While accomodating dense ,population it gives birth to other problems like a traffic jam,air and water pollution as well as job crises and law and order issues.
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 arrangements give a roof to all eligible citizens but
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 give lots of stress and somewhat compromise with safety and independence of movements due to nuisance from drug addicts and mafias.
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 living in
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 places is costlier compared to the same horizontal
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. Horizontal cities constitute single-family homes,duplexes and small condominiums where density per square kilometre is very low compared to the vertical
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.citizens are friendly and respectful to others and common property,law and order are always in place.
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, no traffic issues and pollution at all.The work environment is less competitive and has peace of mind which make these places an ideal place for living. you can get more open space for activities like walking,playing and get-together while staying in the
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. In,conclusion ,as discussed in the above-mentioned paragraphs living in the horizontal
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 is superior to in the vertical
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,economical as well as good for long-term health,that's why I opted for a horizontal
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 rather than a vertical
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