Parents should encourage their children to spend less time on study and more time on doing physical activities. Do you agree or disagree?

Children
have to spend more
time
to do
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exercise and
parents
should help them to arrange their
activities
scheme. I agree with
this
statement, nowadays, more and more
parents
want their
children
to have many distinct skills, so
children
have no
time
to do physical
activities
that affect their
health
and cooperation spirits.
Firstly
,
children
do more exercise make them
strength
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their
health
. Twenty years ago,
children
have their own
time
to do many physical
activities
and they were very
health
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.
Recent
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years,
children
between the competition become fierce in
school
, the
school
and
parents
want they spend more
time
on study, so some
school
took out
sport
class and swap to
other course
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another course
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such
as physical, science,
langrage
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language
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. etc., and
parents
tell them to learn more courses after
school
.
Therefore
,
parents
must take
children
to parks,
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the event
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event
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events
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just walking around the block or walking
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a dog
the dog
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dog
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that all
proved
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children
’s
health
.
Moreover
,
parents
and
school
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schools
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should encourage
children
to do sports. If the kids have the
sport
course that makes they
to
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apply
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create
team work
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teamwork
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skill or find their interesting about
sport
.
For example
,
sport
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sports
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classes which
is
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are
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running, basketball, baseball or rugby those sports make kids
to
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apply
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know how to help each other and cause their
interested
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. In doing so, they can release some pressure in
school
and
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apply
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get better begin to do
new
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the new
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challenge
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challenges
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. To sum up,
children
use more
time
to do exercise or physical
activities
in any way are very important to their
health
and team’s cooperation in future and
parents
are
also
important
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an important
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role in
children
’s
life
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to help them have
health
.
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