Museums and art galleries should concentrate on works that show history and culture of their own country rather than works of the other parts in the world. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Museums

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and

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galleries

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are where show

works

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relating historical and cultural knowledge, and it maybe

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to show more objects representing their own

country

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more than other nations. I totally agree with

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opinion because of advantages for both homeland and

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for other countries.

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, the homeland

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the convenience and increase

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the cognitive

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of citizens. Because the history or

culture

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is the separated things of each

country

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, a

nation

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will meet difficulties in finding what object specialized for

culture

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or history of another, and defining of objects representing for its own is an easier way.

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museum

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and

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galleries

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of

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country

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should concentrate on

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simpler operation.

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,

museums

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or

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galleries

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concentrate

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on

works

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symbolizing for

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country

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will help its citizens gain more deeply

knowledge

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about their

nation

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. If

museums

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find ways to improve the

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of

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work representing for its

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frequently, they will attract more local

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to come and research

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.

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, when each

country

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shows more national

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, it will create

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special and unique national tradition, so the variety

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culture

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in the world could increase.

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with

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a smaller volume of foreign

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means there is little information about other

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,

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encourage

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citizens to travel to another

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for watching more.

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seemly is a way to boost the tourism of other countries.

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, there is a small

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of patterns about Korean traditional clothes in external

art

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galleries

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in Vietnam, by seeing these in Vietnamese

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, people will be desired to travel

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to Korea

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. In conclusion, I think that showing

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representing

culture

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and history of

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nation

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of

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or

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have beneficial effects to not only to their

nation

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but

also

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to other countries.