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High taxes discourage economy growth. Do you agree or disagree?

Whether high
taxes
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 help or hurt economic
growth
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 is a topic that divides opinion. I agree they slow
growth
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 because they reduce foreign investment and weaken the entertainment sector,
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 some argue
taxes
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 are necessary for national infrastructure.
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 with, high
taxes
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 often reduce foreign direct investment. When corporate
tax
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 rates are high, multinational companies tend to avoid opening factories or offices in those locations.
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, they move operations to
countries
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 with lower
tax
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 burdens in order to protect their profits.
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, Ireland and Singapore have attracted many global firms largely because of their
favorable
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tax
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 systems.
As a result
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,
countries
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 with higher
taxes
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 lose out on valuable job opportunities and long-term capital development.
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, high
taxes
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 can harm the entertainment sector. Well-paid athletes or musicians often consider
tax
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 policies before they sign contracts in a particular country. If
taxes
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 are too high, they may choose to work
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.
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,
countries
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 with lower
tax
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 rates tend to attract more international sporting talent, which strengthens their global image and economic returns.
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, a high-
tax
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 environment can push key figures away and limit economic opportunities tied to those industries.
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, some people believe high
taxes
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 are needed to fund public infrastructure, which supports long-term
growth
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.
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,
this
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 argument depends heavily on government efficiency. In reality, many
countries
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 struggle with corruption or mismanagement that wastes public funds.
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, even when large amounts of
tax
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 are collected, the resulting projects may be ineffective.
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 weakens the argument that high
taxes
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 always lead to
growth
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. In conclusion,
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taxes
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 can fund infrastructure, they often reduce investment and hurt major sectors when not managed properly. If governments wish to use
tax
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 policy to support
growth
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, they must first prove they can manage resources in a way that produces clear, reliable results.

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Task Achievement
Try to include a more detailed explanation for your points to ensure a complete response.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure your ideas connect smoothly from one to the next. Use linking words to make transitions clearer.
Task Achievement
You provided relevant examples that support your main points well, especially regarding foreign investment and the entertainment sector.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are clear and present a strong opinion on the topic.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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