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Music has been and will continue to be the universal language of mankind. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Music
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 is the common thing to talk about when two unknown personalities meet and catch up. As it shows an individual's personality and their way of thinking.
Music
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 is the untold language, which
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 carried forward
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 ages in various ways and
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 will keep going on until human existence is on the planet. And I strongly agree with the statement. To
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 with,
Music
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 has immense power, it will encourage you and give you goosebumps at the same time.
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, it never fails to touch the soul,
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 people connect with
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 so easily. Many of them relate
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 their real-life incidents.
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, nowadays
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K-pop
 singers are very famous. Most of their
songs
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 are in Korean. And recently one of their boy bands won a
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 award which is crucial in the musical industry. Even if their
songs
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 are in a foreign language, the whole world is crazy for their
songs
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 and for them.
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, all around the
world
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world,
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 we have multiple nations and those have diverse cultures. Each culture has its own unique choice
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music
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, so technically we have numerous variations in it.
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, the old melody gets updated and modified over
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 period of time.
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, In the 1990s people were more into classical and soft
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.
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, in the 21st ,century the crowd shifted towards Pop, Rock ,Raps and so forth. So generation to generation
music
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 remains but the nature of the song changes. To summarize
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, I absolutely agree
music
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 has
been
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 a universal language and it will follow the trend till the
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human
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 alive. It’s a magical way of expressing feelings that will not vanish that easily.
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