IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7.5

increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. to waht extent do you agree?

#price #petrol #traffic #pollution #waht
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
In
this
Linking Words
 modern era , many countries are relying on
fuel
Use synonyms
 to maintain their businesses and economies. Some individuals believe that raising the cost of petrol can eliminate commute and
pollution
Use synonyms
problems
Use synonyms
 .
However
Linking Words
 ,I partly agree with
this
Linking Words
 view and explain more details in the following paragraphs. On the one hand , lifting the
fuel
Use synonyms
 price can impact the particular country businesses .
For example
Linking Words
 , If the
fuel
Use synonyms
 prices are increasing enormously , all the products and services related to
fuel
Use synonyms
 prices will
also
Linking Words
 be increased and people need to pay more for their expenses. There is no doubt that , even though most developed countries are implementing clean energies like solar and wind power for their energies sources , oil energy remains the main source of their power supplies.
On the other hand
Linking Words
 , if people are using more
fuel
Use synonyms
 energy for their businesses , they will suffer more traffic and
pollution
Use synonyms
problems
Use synonyms
 in their environment .
For instance
Linking Words
 , one survey from social science shows that people from urban areas are more stressed than rural areas because of commute and air
pollution
Use synonyms
problems
Use synonyms
 . Here , some governments are restricting some days for driving cars in their major cities to reduce those kinds of issues and
this
Linking Words
 would be another good idea for others governments as well . Taking everything into consideration , increasing the petrol price would not be the best solution to solve traffic and
pollution
Use synonyms
problems
Use synonyms
 .In my opinion , one possible solution would be to ban some days for using
fuel
Use synonyms
 energy to reduce commute and
pollution
Use synonyms
 issues.
Submitted by yetunthu.89 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: