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Some people believe that all company decision should be taken by managers, whereas, others think it is better to include employees while decision making ? Discuss both points and give your opinion

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For the growth of the
company
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 it's a crucial factor to take the right agreement every time by the members of the
company
. For
this
, some argue that it's just the
manager
 responsibility to make the
decision
, while others believe that
decision
 should be taken with the approval of all the employees of the
company
. In the essay, I will examine both sides and explain why I consider the
decision
 taken by the approval of all employees is better than just by the
manager
. Those who believe that
manager
 is the only one to take decisions have two main arguments.
First
 of all,
this
 post is given to the most qualified
member
 of the
company
,
therefore
, they should have enough knowledge to make a
decision
 for the business. Another reason for taking
managers
 as the only crucial part to make a
decision
 is the level of experience they have in the field. As,
for example
,
managers
 have more experience than a quality control officer or any other
member
 of the organisation, the
decision
 making is a lot easier and more dependable if it is taken by
managers
 than any other
member
 of the organisation. Others, on the other side, maintain that agreement making works best if it is done by including all the employees of the business have two main reasons. It is always a tough accord to take in a large association. If it is a large
company
 like google or intel, just
managers
 can never take decisions for the whole
company
 as they might not know what is going on in the organisation.
Additionally
, group
decision
 helps to lessen the burden on one person and help to divide the responsibilities between the workers that ultimately boost each
member
 of the
company
. In conclusion, the
manager
 can take the
decision
 of the
company
 if the association is a small business.
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