Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The given diagram shows the information about the plans of a public
park
in Arnold avenue in two different
period
Change to a plural noun
periods

The singular noun period follows a number other than one. Consider changing the noun to the plural form.

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in 1920 and today. Overall, today's
park
has numerous recreational as well as cafe compared to Grange
park
in the given old
period
and in the south-east bottom has water feature; both side entrance cannot change in two
period
Change to a plural noun
periods

The singular noun period follows a number other than one. Consider changing the noun to the plural form.

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, According to the diagrams illustrate, in 1920, Grange
Park
, in the middle of the
park
was eliminated by a rose garden with four sides of sitting seats in today's
park
.
similarly
, in the old
period
of the
park
had a stage of musicians was replaced by an amphitheatre for concerts and in the south-west rose garden was eliminated. In the north-east rose garden was changed by
cafe
Add an article
the cafe
a cafe

The noun phrase cafe seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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,
similarly
Add a comma
,similarly

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase similarly. Consider adding a comma.

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the same side pond for water plants was replaced by children's play area. In the
south-east
Correct your spelling
southeast

The word south-east doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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of
park
Correct article usage
the park

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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,
glasshouse
Correct article usage
the glasshouse

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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was replaced by the water feature.
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