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Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

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The given diagram shows the information about the plans of a public
park
 in Arnold avenue in two different
period
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periods
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 in 1920 and today. Overall, today's
park
 has numerous recreational as well as cafe compared to Grange
park
 in the given old
period
 and in the south-east bottom has water feature; both side entrance cannot change in two
period
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, According to the diagrams illustrate, in 1920, Grange
Park
, in the middle of the
park
 was eliminated by a rose garden with four sides of sitting seats in today's
park
.
similarly
, in the old
period
 of the
park
 had a stage of musicians was replaced by an amphitheatre for concerts and in the south-west rose garden was eliminated. In the north-east rose garden was changed by
cafe
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the cafe
a cafe
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,
similarly
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,similarly
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 the same side pond for water plants was replaced by children's play area. In the
south-east
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southeast
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 of
park
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the park
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,
glasshouse
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the glasshouse
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 was replaced by the water feature.
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