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Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create, while others struggle to survive. Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that some famous
artists
 earn huge amounts of money for what they create, while there are some other
artists
 who are not able to achieve the same standards as them. From my point of view, it is not necessary for the government to take steps to resolve
this
 unfair situation.
This
 income difference is something that should occur in almost everyone’s working life. The reason for
that is
, there has to be competition between people for them to achieve better standards by adding to what they do currently. On one hand, there are some
artists
 who receive much higher amounts of money and probably the reason behind it is that their
work
 of art is being liked more by
the
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society and
therefore
 they get what they deserve.
On the other hand
, some
artists
 get a lot
less
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 amounts of money compared to others.
This
 will probably lead them to judge what they create more and find a way to improve their
work
.
This
 is basically the whole point of
this
 competition in every type of business.
Moreover
, if
artists
 feel any type of government support behind them, they will take their job really easy which might lead them not to improve or develop themselves at their
work
 at all. As a
consequence
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this
 would push the art sector to get weaker and weaker each day and in long
term
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 the quality of art might decrease.
Also
, when the
artists
 realize that they’re being compared to the other
artists
 that are slightly better than them and earn more, they will understand by the time what
the
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society expects from them and focus on their
work
 more to
fulfill
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 those expectations. In conclusion, I personally do not agree with governments taking steps to resolve the unfair income situation between
artists
.
Artists
 should have competition between them in terms of improvement.
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