Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create, while others struggle to survive. Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that some famous

artists

earn huge amounts of money for what they create, while there are some other

artists

who are not able to achieve the same standards as them. From my point of view, it is not necessary for the government to take steps to resolve

this

unfair situation.

This

income difference is something that should occur in almost everyone’s working life. The reason for

that is

, there has to be competition between people for them to achieve better standards by adding to what they do currently. On one hand, there are some

artists

who receive much higher amounts of money and probably the reason behind it is that their

work

of art is being liked more by

the

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society and

therefore

they get what they deserve.

On the other hand

, some

artists

get a lot

less

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amounts of money compared to others.

This

will probably lead them to judge what they create more and find a way to improve their

work

This

is basically the whole point of

this

competition in every type of business.

Moreover

, if

artists

feel any type of government support behind them, they will take their job really easy which might lead them not to improve or develop themselves at their

work

at all. As a

consequence

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this

would push the art sector to get weaker and weaker each day and in long

term

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the quality of art might decrease.

Also

, when the

artists

realize that they’re being compared to the other

artists

that are slightly better than them and earn more, they will understand by the time what

the

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society expects from them and focus on their

work

more to

fulfill

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those expectations. In conclusion, I personally do not agree with governments taking steps to resolve the unfair income situation between

artists

Artists

should have competition between them in terms of improvement.

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Topic Vocabulary:

income disparity
struggling artists
market demand
public preference
government support
grants
funding
exhibitions
cultural wealth
societal benefits
market dynamics
government intervention
art market
public taste
private investment
balanced artistic community
financial assistance
creative industry
artistic merit
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Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create, while others struggle to survive. Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Scientific research should be funded by governments rather than commercial organizations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socializing with others. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that schools do not do enough to teach young people about how to look after their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With the increased global demand for oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more of these natural resources. To what extent do you agree?

People from many countries are marrying later and having fewer children. Give reasons why this is happening. Are there any positive or negative developments regarding this?