There was a time when people only shopped out of necessity, but these days shopping seems to have become a new form of leisure activity. People don't appreciate the value of money anymore. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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It is clear that many

people

like to go shopping as a new type of attraction. While I agree with

this

statement that buying new useless things is considered a bad trend, I

also

believe that for some

people

it can be a way to feel relaxed. We live in

the

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world where we have a lot of different stress and many

people

are searching for various relaxation methods. For someone, find their leisure in meditating while others feel happy when going to the park or the mountains. It depends on a person's personality,

for instance

, my friend likes to go to a shopping mall. She likes vivid clothes and eye-catching things so she feels joyful when she buys them.

However

, I

also

reckon that

people

tend to waste time and procrastinate rather than spending their time on workouts or

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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