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Some people think it is no longer necessary for children to go to school because they can do all their learning online. Others believe learning in schools is essential. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In some peoples opinion,as all learning material is available online and
students
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 can learn from the comfort of home ,they do not require to attend the
school
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 in person,while others believe it is vital to go to
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 for all directional growth of
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.The
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 paragraphs will shed light on both sides of the notion but, I think attending
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 in person is more beneficial than online. At present due to the covid-19 pandemic for reducing the spread of infection, the majority of universities and higher study institutes started online learning and it works better for them.So some people argue that
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 should be fine for schools too.Because learning material is available on the internet and video learning through google classrooms should work the same way for children.
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 ,it will save their time to travel back and forth from home to
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,they do not need to face harsh temperatures in some countries like Canada where in winter temperature remains below zero.
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,
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 in early learning
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 do not have the computer knowledge to go online and attend
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,their attention span is limited so,they need constant reminders which,is not possible in online
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 they can study learning material online, life lessons like discipline,teamwork,respect and other moral values can not be taught through online
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,connectivity of the internet is an issue that disrupts learning activities.
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, peer relations which are an important life lesson will be missed. Long hours on screen can damage the eyesight of
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. In ,conclusion online learning looks more convenient but, is not that beneficial for schools in terms of all directional development of
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. so I will refer to person schooling for
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 in early grades.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • customizable learning pace
  • global connectivity
  • social skills development
  • self-discipline
  • unequal access to technology
  • structured environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • supervised learning
  • one-size-fits-all approach
  • peer pressure
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