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Some film companies spend millions of dollars on the production of a single movie. Is it necessary to spend a lot of money to make a good movie? What factors contribute to the success of a movie?

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Millions of dollars are spent for making a single
movie
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 by some
companies
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. It is not compulsory as eradication of poverty from the world should be a prime concern for all corporations worldwide. The success of a
film
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 depends on the story and
dialogues
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. Encountering the problem of global poverty should be considered a significant task by all multinational
companies
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. They can donate some of their wealth to reduce the trouble of poor and needy people. Almost
one
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 of the world population is unable to afford even
basic
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 necessities of life. The aid from multi-million organizations could improve the standard of life of these people.
Companies
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 just have to give only a fraction of their wealth. Some of these corporations are already trying to eradicate poverty globally.
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, UNICEF has been providing financial and medical aid to the deprived nations in impoverished
neighborhood
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. Organizations believe
exorbitant
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the exorbitant
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 expense of money makes a
movie
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 famous. The content of a
film
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,
however
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, contributes mainly
for
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 its success. The story should be plotted logically and well explained in the
film
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.
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 will help viewers to clearly understand the theme of a
film
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.
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, producers can get more fame if they introduce some innovative and radical ideas,
such
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 as science fiction, in movies rather than keep sticking to the old concept of romanticism.
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, the delivery and quality of dialogues are equally important because
this
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 is the way to express
message
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a message
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 in a good and eloquent manner. Dialogues are very crucial as people remember them and even use them in communication for referencing.
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, the famous dialogue of
1984
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the 1984
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movie
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 ‘The Terminator’ is “I will be back”. In conclusion,
companies
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 should prioritize the plight of underprivileged societies
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 of squandering
tremendous
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a tremendous
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 amount of wealth in the production of movies. A
movie
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 can get success and popularity by the quality of its content
not
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 through enhanced expenditure.

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