Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is well-known fact that a healthy hobby can improve the quality of life. Many hold the view that activities like reading books or solving puzzles stimulate the brain and improve our mental capabilities, whereas others argue that the sense of leisure activity is relaxing the mind and spirit by chilling.
This
essay will shed light on both sides while I am in favour of the idea to be more engaged in a time
of pursuits.
Those who agree with the latter idea give the reason that,
nowadays most people have a hectic work schedule and Remove the comma
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also
many factors like financial constraints or dealing with an annoying boss which means feeling less of job
satisfaction. Due to this
reason after the job
they are inclined to please themselves by having more free time
for themselves. To illustrate, a hard worker, employed in the factory has a physical
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physically
job
with high job
pressure that they may stressout
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stress out
time
he has a strong tendency to take a small nap or just stay passively like watching his favourite TV program, probably he has burned out and doesn’t have enough energy for any activity to be involved. Accordingly
, after-work
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the after-work
time
they need to recharge their batteries to be rejuvenated and be prepared for the battle of life.
On the other hand
, I and others believe that free time
can be filled by doing a hobby as reading
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that rewardable habit. since Many types are work are routine Change the spelling
instil
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with lots of data entry, they wouldn’t be beneficial for improving our skills. By occupying ourselves Correct your spelling
paperwork work
in
more challenging hobbies like solving puzzles would have a chance to work on the logical part of the brain or doing sports like hobbies help us improve our athletic skills through that hobby.
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much
time
means spending time
just resting and chilling without being seriously active, however
, I personally believe that being more engaged like sport spread positive emotion and improve their life circumstances.Submitted by mary.zadegan on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
