Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that government should make sure their citizens have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Individuals
health
and
diet
should be their own responsibilities according to some people,while the other think
government
should care for their citizen's
health
and eating
habits
.The
next
paragraphs will shed light on both sides and I think
health
and
diet
can be decided by individuals themselves,rather than the
government
.
Health
and
diet
are the most important aspects of life as both are related to each other if you do not care for a
diet
then
,
eventually
Add a comma
,eventually
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your
health
going to suffer due to unhealthy eating
habits
or due to unhealthy
food
.
For example
foods from restaurants and packaged
food
contains a large number of fats,salt and sugar which in long run leads to cardiovascular and other
health
issues.
Besides
bad
habits
like smoking and drinking leads to cancer and lung
diseases
,so an individual should be aware of the consequences of their unhealthy
habits
.
On the other hand
government
's responsibility is to set
food
standards for restaurants and
food
industries.So that the ingredients used and quantity of ingredients used in preparing
food
are healthy for the general population.
government
to make sure,Safety and hygiene standards for manufacturing and cooking are followed by restaurants and
food
processing units.Proper infection control measures are in place in
such
industries and controlling it by taking samples for safety.For epidemic
diseases
like goitre in some countries, the
government
should come up with additives in
food
,like adding iodine in salts for control of
such
diseases
. In conclusion,
health
and
diet
are individual's decisions and it should not be controlled by the
government
but the
government
can provide recommendations for healthy eating and prevention of
diseases
by promoting good
habits
.
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