Task 2: Some experts believe that when a country is already rich, any additional increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens any more satisfied. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some researchers are thinking that when a
country
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develops finance
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all of the
people
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living here will be feeling better and won’t want economic wealth more. I think it isn’t a good
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for some
reason
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and I will improve it right now. There are a lot of reasons why I disagree with
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opinion.
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of all, I believe that your
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isn’t the richest
country
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in the world so you think your
nation
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doesn’t need to develop more financially is a bad
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.
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the USA is one of the most
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country
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countries
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developing in the world, compared to another
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maybe is richer but
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country
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never
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still position
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they always
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increase the average of
economy
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the economy
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then
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they can to be a leader of the world to help another
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.
This
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is the
first
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reason
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I disagree with
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idea
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and
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, if your motherland has a good economy, all things like exports, imports, deliveries to another
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will be easier. You can import seafood,agriculture, very easy or maybe you can get a good price for
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.
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, in my opinion, an increase in economic wealth is always good and convenient for citizens in all countries. But some
people
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agree with the
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that if the platform of economic wealth was
stronged
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stronger
strong
, they wouldn't want to be richer for some
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. Maybe their life was more satisfying so they want to enjoy and forget activities or don’t motivate themselves to develop for the
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to increase their economy. Or the perspective was limited
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they can’t saw a long-vision in future that
nation
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didn’t develop so all of
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people
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the people
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will have a trouble exports and imports. I think non-knowledge is the biggest
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people
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don’t want to be richer. Overall, I disagree with the opinion of some experts that increasing the average financial status of a
country
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won’t give citizens more satisfaction.
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