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The government has announced that it plans to build a new university. Some people think that your community would be a good place to locate the university. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of establish a new university in your community. Use specific details in your discussion.

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University
 is the essential study-career path that many students want in their resumes. if you can graduate from a prestigious
university
,
this
 is a shortcut to success in life. Some
people
 support the opinion that the
university
 has only advantages,
however
, in between constructing, the
university
 affects a
community
 in many ways. In the following paragraphs, the reason to support my opinion will be outlined. Building a new
university
 can make many impacts on
people
 or the environment in the nearby areas of the new
university
.
Firstly
, inevitable construction is cause to air pollution around the construction area
such
 as dust in the air,
this
 makes
people
 bad healthy in the respiratory system.
Secondly
, the government will be replaced the residential areas with any utility of
university
.
Finally
, traffic jam is the
last
 disadvantage that I think. Construction in the
community
 need crucially building material like brick and mortar. so, during transportation,
this
 supply is transported by the big truck which causes traffic many problems.
On the other hand
,
University
 will make nearby communities from ordinary
community
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 as
people
 from other areas will move to
this
community
 for study in the educational institution.
In addition
, when many
people
 come to study in
university
 after that the government will consider about the public transport which will be planned to build in the future.
Moreover
, the
university
 will give a chance for a population in
this
 area which they cannot afford to study in the prestigious
university
 were far from here. In conclusion, even though building a
university
 has some disadvantages to the
community
, New
university
 impacts the
community
 in good ways more than they make the problem.
As a result
, Building a
university
 will have a good plan that how to solve the pollution and
community
 when these problems occur.
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