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In some countries, traditional art is in facing extinction. Some people think that governments should spend some public money on its preservation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Traditional
art
 is part of our national cultural heritage. In recent years, it is facing extinction and many people think that the
government
 need to support it and
i
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 agree with it. Traditional arts
such
 as folk music, painting, etc... It is a typical culture of a nation. It represents
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history, so we can see and know about the formation of a nation through it. In my country, our childhood is associated with folk songs when we were born and grow up. Painting can give you imagination and creativity.
For example
, traditional
art
 courses,
such
 as pottery and paper-cutting classes, in school not only help students to deepen their understanding of their culture and traditions, but
also
 encourage imagination and creativity.
Government
 need to create more funding for the protection of traditional
art
. Protecting traditional
art
 can cost a lot of money but the benefits we have from that will help our economy. The country will have many tourists and people who want to find and discover our traditional
art
.
Furthermore
, That will grow the
government
 tax and build a new workforce that has more imagination and creativity,
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 can help the development and financing of
country
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. The education
need
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 to supply more courses to let people know more about
the
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apply
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tradition
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art
 as a heritage
cultural
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culture
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. The conservation of
cultural
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culture
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as
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protect the
proud
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 of the nation. To conclude,
Government
need
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 to support and give more funding for the conservation of traditional
art
. Because traditional
art
have
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 more value to education,
economic
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economy
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 and society .
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