In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What are your opinions on this?

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who have been working at a

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to be normal as they could gain work experience, while others completely disagree with the previous statement. In my opinion, it is unethical and could possibly

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as exploitation of underage

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.

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, I disagree with the statement that it is normal if the

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are working.

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, the

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are not mature enough to work and the golden age of growth of the

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is at their age of 3-5 years old. If they spent most of their time working

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of learning formal education, it would prevent the growth of the

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and increase the chance of early mental illness in their childhood.

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, in many developing

countries

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that have been using child

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there is a rising number of childhood depression that could bring negative effects to the country.

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, it is unethical by using underage

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in many

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. The human

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activists could bring

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issue and might give punishment or sanction to the

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that have been involved in underage labours.

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, recently a country in Africa

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been using

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the child

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as silicon mine

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and the country had been punished by international authorities

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making them unable to sell their products overseas. To summarize, the

countries

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that have been using underage

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should be punished because it is unethical.

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, I undoubtedly disagree with the statement that some people assumed it is good for them to gain experience. In order to prevent

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things happen, the local government should have a clear and concise law and control the minimum age for

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and eventually reduce the risk of

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exploitation.