In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What are your opinions on this?

Several people assumed that
children
who have been working at a
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to be normal as they could gain work experience, while others completely disagree with the previous statement. In my opinion, it is unethical and could possibly
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as exploitation of underage
workers
.
In other words
, I disagree with the statement that it is normal if the
children
are working.
Firstly
, the
children
are not mature enough to work and the golden age of growth of the
children
is at their age of 3-5 years old. If they spent most of their time working
instead
of learning formal education, it would prevent the growth of the
children
and increase the chance of early mental illness in their childhood.
For example
, in many developing
countries
that have been using child
labors
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extensively
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there is a rising number of childhood depression that could bring negative effects to the country.
Secondly
, it is unethical by using underage
labors
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in many
countries
. The human
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activists could bring
this
issue and might give punishment or sanction to the
countries
that have been involved in underage labours.
For instance
, recently a country in Africa
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been using
child
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the child
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as silicon mine
workers
and the country had been punished by international authorities
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making them unable to sell their products overseas. To summarize, the
countries
that have been using underage
workers
should be punished because it is unethical.
Therefore
, I undoubtedly disagree with the statement that some people assumed it is good for them to gain experience. In order to prevent
such
things happen, the local government should have a clear and concise law and control the minimum age for
workers
and eventually reduce the risk of
children
exploitation.
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  • Child labor
  • Exploitation
  • Minimum age
  • Work experience
  • Survival
  • Taking responsibility
  • Education
  • Poverty
  • Legal restrictions
  • Physical toll
  • Psychological impact
  • Cultural perceptions
  • International conventions
  • Economic impact
  • Work-study programs
  • Skilled labor
  • Unskilled labor
  • Developing economies
  • Moral implications
  • Professional development
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