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Some countries import a large amount of food from other parts of the world. To what extent is this a positive or negative trend?

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Due to the advancement in transportation and communication, it is not wrong to consider the whole
world
 a global village. Many nations have benefited from the export and import of foods, and with progress in transportation, goods can be delivered from one end of the
world
 to another within a few days. Some see
this
 phenomenon as negative, but, in my opinion, the overall effect is positive for both the nations involved in the trade. There
is
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 a plethora of reasons why
this
 development has benefits.
First
 and foremost, not all nations around the
world
 have
suitable
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climate
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 to grow crops.
Thus
, there is a shortage of
food
, especially fresh produce in those
countries
. They,
therefore
, rely heavily on other
countries
 to supply them with the necessary items.
For instance
, Canada is one of the major importers of
food
 because in that country there is snow for more than six months of the year.
Secondly
, the crops from places of abundance can be made available in places of scarcity with the help of today’s transportation facilities.
In other words
, importing matches the demand and supply of the nation;
this
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 results in
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healthy economic growth.
Therefore
, it is a win-win situation, where the
food
 gets consumed by the importing country and it generates revenue for the residents of the exporting country.
Lastly
, it boosts
economies
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 of the
world
 by creating employment opportunities in
trading
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 industry and its branches. It has been estimated that 18% of the
world
’s population is being employed in
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import-export and related industries. What is more, trading of agricultural produce
also
 helps to fill the gap of inequality in a society where workers are provided with a good salary, especially in developing
countries
, so they have an opportunity to better their standard of living. On the downside, imported
food
 is more likely to contain harmful chemicals like preservatives and additives because it has to travel thousands of miles. In my opinion,
countries
 that have the right conditions to grow
food
 should definitely grow it themselves because locally grown
food
 is always healthier and tastier. Of course, some
countries
 do not have the right climate or soil and for them importing is the only option.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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