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Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality, high school students should be encouraged to question and offer criticisms of their teachers. Others think this will lead to a loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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It was thought by some people, high school pupils should be given the freedom of questioning and criticising
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 of their masters to improve the standards of the education system. 
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 others think it is a way of losing respect and keeping good order in the classroom. There are numbers of positivities
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marketing warfare between Emirates and Qatar Airways can always be a matter that can lead to a lot of questions and
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criticism
 among teachers and students. On the flip side, heated arguments between teachers and students could lead to a situation they start disrespecting each other even out of the
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 level which will be harmful to the future of the undergraduate. In my opinion, it is
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 that pupils have a fair chance of
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 or criticising their masters over a
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 or an incident purely based on educational purpose and it should be done in a respectful manner to avoid any misunderstanding In conclusion, it is understood that reasonable questioning by students in
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