In recent years some countries have experienced very rapid economic development. This has resulted in much higher standards of living in urban areas but not in the countryside. This situation may bring some problems for the country as a whole. What are these problems? How might they be reduced?

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growth has increased in some countries over the course of time.
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living
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standard has improved in
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; while, no
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development has been seen in rural
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.
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might be responsible for the increasing gap in the lifestyle of urban and rural inhabitants and the whole nation will split. These problems can be dealt
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providing equal facilities in both
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and in villages.
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standard of living in urban
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is due to the economic development of a country.
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flourishing economy has not benefited people of rural
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. In many parts of the world, villagers are living in terrible conditions. They cannot afford better healthcare and educational facilities because of impoverishment. Some of them even do not have enough financial resources to
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their basic needs
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food and water. Simultaneously, their counterparts in the
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enjoy a lavish lifestyle.
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gives birth to hatred and
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of
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in villagers for the inhabitants of
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.
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, they become segregated and it causes
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of unity among a nation. The most practical solution to these problems is to provide equal facilities to every individual regardless of
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areas
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. The government should ensure that everyone in a country should have
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stability to afford a good quality of life.
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will encourage unity among the
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and people will build strong relationships. As consequence, all the people of a country will work together towards a common goal which will be in the favor of national wellbeing and prosperity. In conclusion, development in
economy
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the economy
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has resulted in
better
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a better
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standard of living in
cities
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but
countryside
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the countryside
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is deprived of these benefits.
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situation is likely to increase
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the gap
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and decrease unity between natives of urban and rural regions. These problems can be solved if
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discrimination is eradicated by providing all nationals equal benefits.
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