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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is considered by some
people
 that
entertainment
such
 as
music
 may attract society with a variety of cultures and ages to blend, despite their differences. I personally agree with the statement.
However
,
music
 is not the only factor that may attract
people
. There are other factors that are able to blend them
such
 as foods, similar hobbies and/or certain activities.
Entertainment
 is known as something
that is
 able to improve the happiness of a person.
Furthermore
,
entertainment
 may take someone out of boredom.
Music
,
for instance
, is a kind of
entertainment
 that many
people
 enjoy the most.
Music
 is able to bring the public with different backgrounds, cultures, and even ages together.
Furthermore
,
music
 is able to send the messages of life to them in a fun way. Whereas,
this
 may not apply to those with difficulties in hearings, or to a deaf person. In terms of unity,
music
 is not the only way to bring
people
 together. Some other ways that may bridge the differences could be foods, similar hobbies, movies, poetry and other entertaining activities.
For example
, the community in my country are willing to gather when there is free food for everyone. On
this
 occasion, they are willing to travel and do additional effort when free food is offered.
Furthermore
,
this
 opportunity is becoming a process to bring
people
 with different backgrounds and conditions together. In conclusion, I personally agree that
music
 is a good approach to bringing
people
 together.
However
, there are
also
 different kinds of
entertainment
 that can be used to unify society with different cultures, backgrounds, ages and perspectives.
Submitted by Kusuman.retno on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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