Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is argued that the financial
aid
provided by developed
nations
for the developing
nations
does not solve
poverty
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issue. Henceforth, developed
nations
should seek
alternative
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way
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to help developing
nations
instead
of financial
aid
. Given the circumstances, I definitely agree with the previous statement because the advantages, of various
aid
instead
of solely financial
aid
, outweigh the disadvantages.
First
and foremost
the
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developed
countries
could provide teachers for free to the poor
countries
in order to improve their
education
system.
Education
is a powerful tool and could create a strong foundation in order for the
country
to successfully
managing
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and governing a
country
.
For example
,
singapore
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Singapore
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was once a poor
country
and now has
becoming
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a powerful
country
due to the help of
england
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in providing a better
education
system.
Thereafter
, rich
countries
could offer
trade
opportunity
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opportunities
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for poor
countries
. By establishing
trade
agreement
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agreements
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between each other, poor
countries
could have the opportunity to boost their
economical
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activity and
thus
create jobs for their people.
For instance
, Japan was once a poor
country
and they have been given the chance to sell their products
at
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the United States and now the two
nations
have been benefited
by
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the
trade
activities. Financial
aid
is essential, but that does not mean it is the only possible way to solve poverty as there are many ways to provide
aid
for
the
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developing
countries
. It is way better for advanced
countries
provide
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education
system improvement
aid
and
trade
opportunity as it has been proven.
Therefore
, it is better to provide
other type
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another type
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of
aids
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aid
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instead
of financial
aid
only.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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