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Some people think that it should be mandatory for students to perform unpaid community service to graduate. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

It is undeniable that participating in voluntary
activities
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 provides many advantages for
students
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.
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 is the reason why many people suggest that these
activities
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 should be a compulsory part
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 graduation requirements. I personally agree with
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 viewpoint for many reasons, described in the following paragraphs.
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 with, I strongly believe that education should not be limited to academic pursuits.
Students
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 should accumulate life
skills
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 in order to become successful in the future.
Students
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 who participate in voluntary
work
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 can develop many social
skills
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such
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 as teamwork, communication,
problem solving
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 and time management
skills
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 when they
work
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 with people from different backgrounds. These
activities
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 are considered to be excellent preparation for the future by offering
students
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 a chance to build their resumes,
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explore career options and
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discover their hidden talents and interest.
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, if someone is interested in becoming a teacher, he or she can do tutoring; if his or her interest is in health care, working in a hospital would be beneficial.
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, unpaid community
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 can
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 increase their creativity and self-confidence, leading to
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notable achievement in adult lives. 
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, working on voluntary
activities
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 spontaneously not only makes
students
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 more aware of their
neighborhood
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 and society but
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 helps them gain more experiences to develop their personalities and responsibility.
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,
students
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 will learn to be responsible for completing assigned jobs and develop a good
work
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 ethic. On top of that, many colleges and companies are increasingly looking for these
skills
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 and experiences from graduates because they are confident that these qualities are important.
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 means that
students
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 who graduate with voluntary experience tend to have a better opportunity to apply for college study and career. In conclusion, unpaid community service should be a graduation requirement because it offers
students
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 many benefits in their future
career
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 and life.

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