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Some people think it is better for people to change their career at least once in their life and do different kinds of jobs. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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There is an opinion that people should change their
job
 at least once
in activity
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 to do other jobs. I agree with
this
 statement
,
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 because it is important to know some kind of
sphere
. But there is some specific what about I explain below. It is impossible to work in
one
sphere
 or workplace in whole of
life
. Every person needs to explore several spheres. In that case, the person will know how to work other rules in
life
. The different experiences are very helpful in some situations and at least, it is interesting to talk with people who
job
 in other areas. 
For instance
, the experience of working teachers can help in government agencies, museums or in writing.
On the other hand
, there are some specialised, which is better not change.
For example
, to be a doctor all of
life
,
it
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is on contrary, useful. Because with each year doctors became more professional and it is more useful than if they choose another profession in the middle of their career. The engineers would be useful too to the community. Sometimes to be professional in
one
 area is better, than working in a different
sphere
 per little time.
Such
 told someone: "I am afraid not
one
 who knows a little of many spheres, I afraid of
one
, who learnt
one
sphere
 deeply and long time" In conclusion, I want to note that before changing a
job
 and send here, it is better to think deeply, because specialises are different. In some ,
sphere
 it is better to remain all of
life
, due to their usage. But there are spheres, which became a good experience to another
job
.
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