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some people prefer to have temporary jobs, which only means they work a few months in a year and use the rest of the time to do what they want. what is your opinion

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There is a growing trend among society to have a job for a short period and spend the rest of their
time
 fulfilling their goals and wishes. Throughout
this
 ,
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 I will agree with
this
 statement with relevant reasons.
To begin
 with,
people
 who have temporary careers have the benefit of spending
time
 on different activities.
Moreover
, these
people
 would spend more quality
time
 with their family, friends and loved ones and
also
 they will live stress-free most of their
time
 from workplace negativity.
For instance
, working all year long will occupy most of your
time
 and barely leave any free
time
 to spend with family comfortably or to attend any event without stress.
Furthermore
,
this
 pattern of working is especially beneficial for older
people
. To be specific, the harsh cold weather makes commuting to work tough, in that
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 is even more difficult for the elderly.
As a result
, temporary work for the season when weather is favourable for physically unfit
people
 would be a better option most of the
time
.
This
 way they can work and save for a few months and
then
 spend their incomes in the warmth of their home with their loved ones.
For example
,
this
 is true for citizens who are near pension age, as they usually have normal age wear and have
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 physical ability in harsh weather. In conclusion, even though having a permanent job would definitely pay way better, for some
people
 a temporary job is the best option. In my opinion, I believe humans are free to choose whatever working pattern they like and suits their general well-being.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • flexibility
  • pursue
  • self-development
  • life satisfaction
  • balance
  • job security
  • financial instability
  • stress and anxiety
  • unemployment
  • long-term financial commitments
  • diverse experiences
  • employability
  • broader perspective
  • adaptable
  • innovative
  • career progression
  • benefits
  • personal growth
  • financial security
  • invest
  • career milestones
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