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Human activities have a negative effect on plant and animal species. Some people say that it is too late to do anything. Some people think that we should take effective action to improve the situation. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. ??

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Nowadays,
animals
 and
plants
 are drastically decreasing because of
the
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human actions.these are very important
in
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 the planet,so In my view,authorities should take strict actions to protect
plants
 from
the
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human beings,but citizens think that it is too late to put restrictions as
people
 are habituated to cut
plants
 as well as kill
animals
.while others think that we should protect them.
this
 essay will discuss both views.
To begin
 with,the main reason for cutting the herbs which occupy more place to grow,
therefore
people
 decided to remove the plant.the benefit of planting
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a plant
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plant
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plants
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 is not only
gives
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an
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oxygen to us but
also
provides
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shed
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 to all
people
.
moreover
,
plants
brings
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 attraction to
house
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the house
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.
for instance
,In some places
people
 health conditions are bad due to
shortage
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 of oxygen.if they planted herbs,they would have
good
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a good
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 life.in order to overcome these issues,
government
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the government
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 put restrictions like
collect
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 money as
penalty
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a penalty
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 from
people
 who try to cut the
plants
. On another side,some
animals
 play a crucial role in someone's life like dogs,cows.these days ,humans are
fascinating
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 to consume
meat
.
therefore
,
animals
 are deteriorating day by day.
although
animals
 are very close to nature,
people
 killed them without hesitation.at
this
 time ,
people
 are adopting
animals
 as pets .because they
are protect
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are protected
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 from theifs
moreover
 they show affection towards
people
,
therefore
authority
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authorities
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 should ban
meat
as a result
people
are stop
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stop
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 consuming
meat
.
for example
,according to
survey
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the survey
a survey
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 ,
population
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the population
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 of consuming
meat
 is more than fruits,Especially
in
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 festival days. To conclude,it is our responsibility to protect the herbs and
animals
.we should try to give them importance.everyone should save
plants
 by pouring water every day,
moreover
 we should
also
 treat
animals
 as our friends.in
this
 way the issue can be reduced.
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