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You are studying at a college which has very limited sports and leisure facilities for students. Write a letter to the principal. In your letter; outline the situation propose ways to improve this situation request a meeting to discuss this Begin your letter 'Dear "Do not write any addresses”

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In the present ,situation college is not having the number of
sports
 which can give us the opportunity to showcase our true potential in
sports
.
Also
, to create consistent effort there is a lack of infrastructure to improve the
sports
.
Last
 year in the general championship, we were competing with 20 colleges in 10
sports
. We were short of a few margins in some tournaments. It would have been a complete one-sided win in our strong
sports
 which are cricket, football, kabaddi,swimming, table tennis and chess. At the present level, we do have a swimming pool but without proper maintenance, lack of cricket equipment, and
also
 with no fitness centre like a gym.
Although
 , we still managed to win 3rd prize in the chess and cricket tournament ,by managing it from external resources. For making an exponential jump in all
sports
 and creating a name of the college brand we need your support in improving the current facilities of
sports
. Our suggestion is to create a gym in college with paid membership for students and free for
sports
 students who are qualified for participating in students. So, it is a sincere request to give your support in the development of an ecosystem related to
sports
 that can enhance numerous
sports
 and facilities required for improving the scale.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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