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Many people say that universities should only offer places to young students with the highest marks, while others say they should accept people of all ages. even if they did not do well at school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In recent years, many
people
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 believe that
universities
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 ought to prepare seats for young students with the highest of marks only.
On the other hand
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, some others believe that tertiary
education
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 should be made available for
people
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 of all ages
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 they may not have performed well at
schools
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.
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 essay would attempt to compare the merits of both ways of thinking. It’s irrefutable that the large majority of
universities
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 today are meant for young
people
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. The reason for
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 because the young generation is the heirs to the future, so it would be fair to say that they deserve more chances than
people
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 of other ages to learn. If higher
education
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 does not offer learning opportunities to older
people
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, the young generation would have more places available for them.
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, the idea to offer seats in
universities
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 to the students with the highest marks only may not be entirely bad as they are bright, intelligent and hard-working youngsters, they put plenty of effort into studying so that’s why they get the best marks.
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, the idea to accept
people
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 of all ages and abilities is not entirely bad as well. If higher
education
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 approves for older
people
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 to join in studying,
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 would create a great opportunity for different-aged
people
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 to meet, get to know, and learn from each other. Every generation has its strong and weak points. Giving them a chance to be close to each other would slowly help them to improve each other’s weak points.
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, accepting older
people
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 into
universities
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 can help a person get a chance to learn more or to restart their life. Apart from that,
people
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’s willingness to learn should
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 be considered since their younger selves’ performances at
schools
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 are based on various factors.
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, in the past, many
people
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 have to deal with their performances at
schools
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 and endeavour to earn a living at the same time,
this
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 situation leads to some of them may have to get bad results at
schools
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 as an obvious consequence. In conclusion, neither of the ideas is completely disadvantageous, both of them have their particular upsides. Higher
education
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 ought to consider opportunities for both young and older
people
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 since everyone deserves a chance to learn.

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Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • merit-based
  • competitive environment
  • academic standards
  • innovation
  • diversity
  • mature students
  • equitable
  • inclusive admission policies
  • educational disadvantages
  • holistic admission process
  • extracurricular achievements
  • non-traditional students
  • equal opportunities
  • societal progress
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