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Out of a country’s health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and prevention measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The given table charts demonstrate the number of men and women, who lived in the Republic of Freedonia,in 6 different categories during
20_year
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 period. From an overall perspective, females were far behind
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men in all sectors in 1975.
Although
,in 1995,they made a significant growth especially in Communication, Wholesale and retail trade. As can be presented in the
first
 diagram,males were predominant in 6 employment fields.
Moreover
, the highest proportion
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 related to Public Sector (non_defence) with 850000 members and 700000 individuals for Manufacturing, Wholesale and retail trade.
In addition
, the rest of the chart
was fluctuated
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 between 25000 and 42000. A close look at a
second
 graph reveals that the employment industry of Freedonia saw a noticeable change and it can be understood that the quantity of female
employee
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employees
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 grow in the time of 20 years.Women went ahead of men in
Communications
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the Communications
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 and Wholesale sectors.
Besides
 that,it can be seen the small gaps in Finance/Banking and Public segment (defence). By the way,boys overtook in other sections.
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