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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Although
 in several countries it is believed that it is essential to allocate a large budget for constructing new railways line for high-speed trains between cities, others believe that the money should be spent on the domestic
transportation
 systems. In my opinion, it is better to construct the railway lines of fast trains. On the one hand, it is crucial to spend large money on the latest
transportation
 system in your country and I agree. One of the most important aspects of using
this
 kind of
transportation
 is that it connects all the cities around yours and it means a lot of tourists can easily come to your hometown.
As a result
 of
this
 incident, considerable development in the tourism industry can be expected.
Moreover
, another good aspect of
this
 system that can be contemplated is that it gives a lot of job opportunities to its inhabitants because
people
 can be transported fast than in the past and working in another city will not unreachable anymore.
On the other hand
, while some
people
 believe that it is very important to have
such
 a thing, others think that improving existing public transport must be considered
first
. One of the major aspects of
this
 situation that should be noticed is that by improving public
transportation
 systems we can significantly reduce pollution from our old ones
also
 with
this
 action not only we can reduce the pollution but
also
, we can increase lives quality of our inhabitants.
Furthermore
, upgrading
this
 system can motivate
people
 to use it more. it
also
 helps to increase the proportion of public
transportation
’s users. In conclusion, while
people
 may vary in their opinions, I think that it is better for the countries to allocate their budget to the high-speed train’s railways than their own public
transportation
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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