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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society . Others , however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is not wrong to say that children take up roles after their
parents
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. Despite the fact that education received in
school
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 is irrefutable, I strongly believe that the influence of
parents
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 in modelling a
child
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 to become ideal members of the community is important as compared to the role of teachers in
school
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. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will elucidate on both perspectives and elaborate on why it is so. It is undoubtfully agreed upon that a
child
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's mental and emotional development starts at birth. During
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 crucial moment, a minor receive care and attention from both of his or her
parents
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. He learns to appreciate his surroundings and connect with others through love and play. juvenile abuse or exposure to a violent feud between his
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 will leave offspring perplexed and bereft of kindness and love.
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 that, other behavioural distortions in his
parents
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such
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 as drug addiction, smoking, alcoholism, gambling ect will leave a negative impact on him. He will not only try to mimic poor characters displayed by his
parents
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 but
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 carry them later into
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society which will have detrimental ramifications in his life later on.
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, an anti-social or racist parent will generate anti-social and kids as they make-believe what is true in the minds of the innocent.
School
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 starts when a
child
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's age touches 7 and proceeds until his 5th grade. Some children pursue their education
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 afterwards.
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 institution delivers more academic-based knowledge, they are equally important in contributing to the good behaviour of students. Subjects
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 as moral and religious studies attribute to the positive ways that students should portray themselves in society. During
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 hours, students get to mingle with each other and develop social as well as good communicative skills with society.
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, children spend less time in
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 compared to home and the cognitive development of these skills can never supersede those which were taught during their childhood. Summing up, I would like to reinstate that despite growing up revolves around the lives and influence of others especially in
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, it is undeniable that
parents
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 play a more important role in nurturing a confident and well-interacted
child
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 in his community.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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