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The government has announced that it plans to build a new university. Some people think that your community would be a good place to locate the university. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of establish a new university in your community. Use specific details in your discussion. Write at least 250 words.

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University
 is an essential study-career path that many students want in their resumes. if you can graduating from a prestigious
university
, is a shortcut to success in life. Some
people
 support the opinion that the
university
 has only advantages,
however
, a
university
 affects a
community
 in many ways. In the following paragraphs, the reason to support my opinion will be outlined. Building a new
university
 can have many impacts on
people
 or the environment in the nearby areas of the new
university
.
Firstly
, inevitable construction is a cause of air pollution around the construction area
such
 as it creates dust in the air and
this
 affects
people
’s bad
healthy
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health
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 in
respiratory
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the respiratory
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 system.
Secondly
, the government will be replaced the residential areas with any utility of
university
.
Finally
, traffic jam is the
last
 disadvantage of constructing a new
university
. Construction in the
community
 required crucially building materials
such
 as brick and mortar. So, during transportation,
this
 supply is transported by a big truck which causes many traffic problems.
On the other hand
, a new
university
 can develop a
community
 and
people
 from other areas will move to
this
community
 for
studying
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study
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 in the educational institutions.
In addition
, when many
people
 come to study in a
university
, the government considers improving the public transport.
Moreover
, a
university
 will give a chance to a population in an area to study in a prestigious
university
. In conclusion, even though building a new
university
 has some disadvantages to the
community
,
new
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a new
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university
 impacts the
community
 in good ways and has more merits than demerits.
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