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“All children should learn to speak a foreign language as soon as they start school.” How far do you agree with this proposal? How important is it for a child to learn a foreign language?

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Few topics are more important than a child’s education, and the issue of a
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 will probably always be controversial. From my side of
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perspective, the benefit of being bilingual is priceless, no matter how hard it might be. The main privilege would appear to be the effect that it has on a child's intelligence. Especially in countries with growing populations
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 classes in French, Spanish and German, appears to be developing much
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 than the others.
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 those who are bilingual, tend to have improved memory, enhanced concentration and ability to multitask. A
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 advantage relates to employment opportunities, which can be extremely high if job providers seek a wise and worldly candidate.
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 means that the convenience of being fluent in other languages rises as time goes by, making it almost a necessity. A final point supporting
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 proposal is globalization, by which people communicate with fellow nations through
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 means the students are now obliged to invest in their communication skills and expand their knowledge by receiving information in an alternative
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 makes learning
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 an upcoming priority . Admittedly, I agree with those who argue that simultaneous
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 downside suffers significantly when confronted with a well-scheduled learning system. To summarize, it seems that globalization, the many cognitive benefits are undeniable.
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