Some people believe it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

It is often argued that it is okay to stop trying and accept
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that
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happening to us,
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paid
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or bad grades. I personally disagree with the view and think that with should at least try to improve our
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. On the one hand, people keep telling us accepting bad
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is one way to be grateful. It's often said that other people have it worse,
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why we have to be thankful for what we have right now.
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we should be grateful
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our job even though is bad
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since other people might not have a job.
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, that kind of mindset is bad since it would make society lazy and unwilling to make changes for
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better world. They would keep thinking there
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someone who
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it worse.
On the other hand
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to improve our
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would make the current conditions better and eventually we would achieve the
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that we
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wanted. To elaborate, to achieve the condition that we want, we don't have to do big changes right away, we can start by doing something small.
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, if we
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on money, we can try to improve that by saving money little by little at the end of each
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. It might take a long time, but at least our live's improve bit by bit each
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improve our current
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rather than not doing anything. In conclusion, I think it's better to try even a little bit rather than just accepting bad
situations
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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