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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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I always thought that
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 rapidly changing technology has made human life easy. In upcoming days, the transport medium we use will be fully
autometed
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automated
,
thus
 the only part we are going to perform is the travel in it as
a passengers
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. There are many facts that prove, humans intervention in the work have made errors, whereas the
computer automated
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 machines
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outperform
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same
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 work without any mistake
this
 same applies to driving.
Firstly
 the main feature of automated
cars
 is they are connected to each
others
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 through the Internet because of
this
 they are able to
comunicate
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communicate
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information
such
 as
road
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block
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 or
a
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live traffic conditions. With the help of
this
, the
cars
 are programmed for suggesting and selecting the fastest route,
as a
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a
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passengers
traveling
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 inside are able to reach the destination on time.
Furthermore
, the
cars
are fully equip
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 with many sensors to detect any movement around them
such
 as
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 crossing of the animal on the
moterway
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motorway
. In
such
condition
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 the new
genration
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generation
trasport
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 machine use breaks urgently for the safety of the animals as well as the passenger inside.
Also
, driverless busses and trucks will provide
on time
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 movement of workers and goods.
However
, these
autonomus
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autonomous
 trucks and buses can be a problem as they are always connected to the Internet. When it comes to
the
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cyber security we still
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lacks
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, as many hackers can outperform the hacking and a changing the route perhaps, they can program the vehicles in
way
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 that can cause detrimental effects on passengers.
Moreover
, the main effects will
took
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 a place in the employment as drivers job will no longer
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. In conclusion, I
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belive
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upcoming
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 era of
the
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transport has certainly
benifit
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benefit
benefits
 us.
In addition
 to that, considering the factors above I can say that the
automonus
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autonomous
cars
 will
significatly
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significantly
 improve
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quality
qulity
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 of life.
Therefore
,
adavanges
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advantages
advances
 of having a
computer operated
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 vehicle
outweight
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outweigh
outweighs
 the disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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