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All big business should give a percentage of their incomes to charities. Do you agree or disagree?

#business #percentage #incomes #charities
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All huge
businesses
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 should share a percentage of their
profits
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 with
charities
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. Even small
businesses
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 realize the importance of
charities
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 or corporate social responsibility. I do agree that all
businesses
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 including big
businesses
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 should spend have a budget to share their
profits
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 for
charities
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. The reason is it can improve the corporate image positively and can enhance corporate
profits
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 indirectly.
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, the social activities can boost positive image to the corporate
hence
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 the
company
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 can be
benefit
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a benefit
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 and able to operate in
sustainable
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a sustainable
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 way.
For instance
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, a mining
company
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 in Indonesia named Antam has been popular among the locals because the
company
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 creates public facilities
such
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 as schools, hospitals, roads, etc. It is proven that the
company
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 shares a positive image among the locals.
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 it is important for every corporate to spend
their
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 budget on
charities
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.
Secondly
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, the
charities
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 could indirectly boost the corporate incomes, and
thus
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 the
company
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 is benefited from the charity activities.
For example
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, a mining
company
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 named Antam is very popular because of its generosity and other
businesses
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 see the
company
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 as a trusted business partner so the other
businesses
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 would gladly establish a trade agreement with Antam. Henceforth, social actions could improve
profits
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 indirectly. To summarize,
charities
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 could create positive views and improve the
company
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 income indirectly. For
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 reasons, it is necessary for the companies to give a percentage of their incomes to
charities
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. After thorough analysis on
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 subject, it is recommended for
businesses
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 to improve public facilities as a way of
charities
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 for the locals.
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